Hey dude, thanks for the feedback! I totally did break unfortunately.
Here is a recent set I did:
This is from last summer before I got married. I was at Absolute Comedy in Toronto. Big fan of that club.
That was great. I loved the mimed ejaculate/pterodactyl sounds.
Here's my set from my school's comedy competition. Let me know if there's anything I can work and such. Thanks in advance!
You don't seem very confident in your material. And the pauses caused by reading mid-bit is very jarring. You're talking about the girl in the orgy, and then you read "I don't think I could be in an orgy" it doesn't flow naturally. Memorize the flow of your material, not all the words but the premise and the punchlines.
Shake the pizza was probably the best line even though it was a mistake because it felt like you weren't reading from a script and you had natural delivery.
Also is this heavily editted? It seems like there are a lot of cuts. And ending it turns out this guy gave me a very big tip is weird; it's good to leave on a nice laugh.
And sorry if this sounds harsh but I have the same problems myself. How long have you been doing it?
Here's the first video of me in a few years (as far as I know). I apologize that it's super blurry.
Here's a video of me that is secretly just audio of me.
I have a major problem with this bit but I'll voice that after I've heard what some of you guys think.
Here's me doing a storytelling thing that's different for me, don't know how it went: http://youtu.be/0lBrY7kNnwE
And here is a recent Stand Up set
Hi! I am new here. Here is one of my sets. Subscribe to my channel while you're there! Thanks gang!
This one might be easier to hear: