I guess it would be apropos if my first post here were a video of my first time on stage, at a Comedy Gym Showcase.
Intro - Solid
Tampons - Good/Great
Match Making - Classic Gold
Lingerie - Loved the "Would you like to be a "D" cup, "Used Underwear" was great - Good work.
Great set man, the crowd loved you. You seemed a little nervous at first, but the crowd dug your stuff, so did I!
You're a good joke-smith.
...and then I found ten dollars.
Thanks, Brett. I was less nervous that night than I was the day before, in front of 12 people in class, interestingly enough. It was a bit disconcerting, though, that I couldn't see anyone in the audience. I just hoped I was looking at a guy in my Intro. :-)
No one got the "looked under 'Used Engagement Rings for Sale,'" but, oh well... Heh.
As far as the "used rings" joke, I thought it was funny, but by the time it had registered with me, you had moved on. I think it's smart to not wait TOO long for a laugh, but maybe another line to help connect it for us? Or give us some more time to think about it? Just my thoughts. I thought you had some clever stuff though! Hope to see more!
been a bit but still working. this set was earlier tonight and i was actually not ashamed of.
part of a regular show at a typical rock band type bar so we did it on a stage with monitors. i thought it was a good excuse to put my setlist on the monitor (i'd written up a big 'band style' one the night before as i'm trying to break myself of the mini one cuz i invariably look even if it's in my pocket. but this i can ignore somehow more easily as well as access and it was the right venue..i digress
the hosts got really confused cuz they thought it was from the show the night before and started reading it off not knowing they weren't song titles.
so i went with it a lil and that brings u in on it.
anyways. still very far to go but i had a good time and a responsive lil audience.
hmm i failed at embed.
thoughts/comments/critiques always welcome.
tex, good set! much improved from your last video. The joke that stands out the most was "meth-head-ist". Little rocky first 30 seconds, but you win!
...and then I found ten dollars.
Here's a bunch of Christmas Jokes I wrote:
Hey everyone. Long time listener, first time caller.
This is a video from my first set ever.
Please have your way with it. Let me know which jokes are worth keeping, which are hack, and any other tips or insights you might have. I've already picked out a handful of criticisms (clear the mic stand, don't pace as much, memorize more, be more confident in my delivery) but I wanted to run it by some "insiders" as well.
Thanks in advance to anyone who takes the time to watch.
Dylan, the 1% Milk joke was funny, the Hobo/Homo joke was funny and the before that I was cum was alright. I didn't like a lot of your other stuff, but as you keep writing, you probably won't either, or you will make it better. I think for the amount of material you went through, you did well with memorizing, if you were looking at notes on the stool, I didn't find it distracting. The pacing may have been distracting to people in the front row, but your head exploding from standing still would have bothered them even more.
Hopefully, you enjoyed doing it and you want to do it again. Try not to look for too many pointers from other people and do what makes you feel good up there. And if it works out, it will get some laughs.
Message boards are a great place to have your opinions misconstrued and taken out of context by strangers you would probably hate in real life
Dude, you have some GREAT stuff in there but the jokes are so tight, IMO, a much slower delivery pace would really help sell them. That zippy pace works against the dark material, which should be savored! If I do as well my first time up, I'll be well pleased.
so after a good bit of prodding by a friend i got up the nerve to do some of the more personal and authentic commentary that i've had swirling in my head for a while and didn't have the guts to risk it.
anyways feel like this is building and always open to notes good/bad/indifferent.
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Just testing out my new Canon T2i and here's a little thing I wrote:
I decided to start filming my open mics. This is the first new video I have had in a while. In this video I am really just trying out a bunch of new jokes and obviously some work better than others.
edit: i fucked up the link. will fix later
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Last night at the Studio, pretty fun audience and finally a video I'm ok with sharing.
Still a lil long for submissions I think (8.5min) but for anyone who saw my earlier vid I've made pretty drastic changes to delivery, timing, writing, etc.
Any comments are welcome otherwise I hope you laugh to yourself and someone catches you.
Here's a song I just did at a show last night (i'm not a very good singer):
"In My Mind"
Last edited by Don Luzman; August 24, 2011 at 7:04 AM. Reason: project closed, sorry